Gone Wrong
I was in
my room doing an experiment with my little brother. I was trying to make slime.
“When
you’re done, can I hold it first?” My little brother asked me. I started to
stir the chemicals in the container together.
My brother and I looked at it in amazement as it turned into a gooey
blob. I picked up the slime.
“Give it
to me!” my brother commanded as he grabbed it from my hands.
“No, stop!
You’re going to drop it!” I yelled at him.
Suddenly, the slime flew out of my hands-and-dropped into-the-air-duct-on-the-floor. My brother cried as the slime dripped through.
“give it to me!” my brother commanded. You need to capitalize the beginning sentence. You should put a comma between 'no' and 'stop'. “No stop! You’re going to drop it!” I yelled at him.
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