The Curse
As I walked through the garden with a friend of
mine, we saw a sculpture with big yellow eyes that was shaped like a pot. It
had markings all over it. It also had legs with stripes sticking out on the
top. It made the scenery unbearable. Then, it disappeared.
“I think we
better go home,” I mumbled.
As we walked home, we kept seeing shadows out in the alleys. At that
point, we ran. We were explaining to my grandmother what had happened until all
the lights went out. I felt something grab my shoulders, and I was gone.
Your story is dope! In the last sentence, I think you should put a comma after the word shoulders.
ReplyDeleteYou have a really good story and I can't really find anything other then this sentence, We were explaining to my grandmother what had happen until all the lights went out. You put happen instead of happened.
ReplyDeleteOh yeah. Thanks!
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