Remembrance
Day
Greeting humans of Earth! Some people don’t care about Remembrance Day, and so I ask them, why? Why don’t you want to honor those who die for us? Those who were so young but went to war for us? Those who left their own families knowing that they might never come back to them. To fight a war to not only their family but to keep all our families safe? It just takes two minute of silence. Can’t you spare two minutes? Wouldn’t you go to war to protect your family members? Many did and most of them never came back. Think about it.
The only thing I would fix in your story is the e should be capitalized in Earth, so it should be Greeting humans to Earth
ReplyDeleteThanks!
Deletecool topic choice but you should change : Those who left their own families knowing that they might never come back to them to fight a war to keep his/her family and all of us safe.
ReplyDeleteto : Those who left their own families knowing that they might never come back to them. To fight a war to not only his/hers but all our families safe.
Thank you!
DeleteGreat story just a few things
ReplyDelete1. Those who are so young should be, Those who were so young
2. when you say A lot did, you should say many did
thx for hearing out my suggestions. :)